She

First of all, there's some definite lack of parallelism. Next the phrase "That She is to sling/ about any who cling" is ambiguous, there's just some grammatical and punctuation mistakes, and some of the choices made here are just confusing and it disrupts the flow. Choices are up to the author and should be respected, but when you ask my opinion or any other person's, expect to hear criticism and don't automatically use the "I'm an english major" because 1 it isn't going to change my opinion, 2 it's going to make me question how or why you chose that branch of study, and 3 you shouldn't have to justify yourself to a complete stranger. Not trying to be rude, although I am being a bit, just trying to help a fellow writer. Take it how you want, it's your art and expression, not mine.